#1
I want to fuck every guy I see
But every hot guy I see makes me want to kill myself
Each one reminds me how pathetic I am
Each one reminds me how unnattractive I am
Each one reminds me how lonely I am
Every hot guy I see makes me want to kill myself
But I keep staring.


This wasn't really meant to be a poem or song lyrics or anything. I wrote it when I don't know what I was feeling when I wrote it, but I left it on my desk to see if anyone would find it. No one did, hence the title. Well, at least no one told me if they discovered it. It is very short, as you can see, but I guess it wasn't meant to be a long poem or song, and I think if it were any longer, it wouldn't be as "powerful". A crit for a crit, I suppose. Thanks.
#2
Well, there's not really anything to criticise. It's...abrasive.
Wade in the water, child.
#3
I would have kept that to myself...
My Gear
Fender Strat ('97American Lonestar HSS)
Ibanez RGTHRG1
B-52 AT100
Marshall1960A Cab
Marshall 1960B Cab