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There she is,
laying at the entrance of our home,
Bleeding from the mouth,
Her life,
trembling in my hands.

But this is my home,
Built with my own hands,
This garden, this place of life
is mine, not hers.

Hide the body,
inside the garden, make it grow
make the blood nourish the roots,
make the plants turn red, with anger.

Of course its my anger,
not hers, everything in here is mine.
Because everything in here,
I have built.


First song that I have wrote [ =

So anything I can work on?
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Last edited by dementedpuppy at Jan 26, 2007,
#2
Anyone criticiquing it?
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#3
Its really crude. What sort of music do you plan to put this too? This could work, though its a tad grusome for my liking
#4
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Its really crude. What sort of music do you plan to put this too? This could work, though its a tad grusome for my liking

I play metal (like everyone else on ug lol) but I just kinda made a free verse and threw it together. I have alot, and most of my songs are based on dreams i have, which are usually ****ed up...
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when i was 7 i saw my mom naked while taking a sh** it was pretty sick cuz shes fat....

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Your my hero dementedpuppy.

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