#1
will probably be named either suicide, or question of the day. leaning towards suicide but i dunno. dont have music for it yet but i imaging it a fast paced song, voice somewhat like nickelback. so what do you guys think.

[verse]
you were all that i wanted to be
strong and brave is what you were to me
no-one could take you, not even come close
my image of you was that you couldnt be broke

well i wasnt athletic my attempts wera a joke
i couldnt win a match, every time i would choke
you would come watch me lose, cuz thats all that i did
even though you would back me, i was just the fat kid

[chorus]
what makes a person wanna take their own life away
some have it all but its not enough to make them stay
they leave a wake of pain and another bill we have to pay
why, you ask, well that's the question of the day

[verse]
well that day came, it was just like the others
i couldnt see the signs, my head was under the covers
i was walking out as you were walking in
2 feet away, i still couldnt see it then

and i never thought, it could happen to me
because you see, i had the perfect family
people can be blind i can tell you first hand
everyone can be weak, even the strongest man

[chorus]
what makes a person wanna take their own life away
some have it all but its not enough to make them stay
they leave a wake of pain and another bill we have to pay
why, you ask, well that's the question of the day

[verse]
high school came, there was something to prove
this time will be different, i wont lose
so look at me now, the strongest on the team
starting offense, defense and special teams

well it doesnt matter cause it didnt bring you back
nothing can, and thats the real fact
the pain will remain, always intact
theres a rage inside that just cant be cracked

[chorus]
what makes a person wanna take their own life away
some have it all but its not enough to make them stay
they leave a wake of pain and another bill we have to pay
why, you ask, well that's the question of the day

[verse]
so ill live my life, without you
never knowing what you wanted me to do
so someone tell me, enlighten me please
what brought the strongest man, to his knees

[chrous fade away]
what makes a person wanna take their own life away
some have it all but its not enough to make them stay
they leave a wake of pain and another bill we have to pay
why, you ask, well that's the question of the day
Gear:
Ibanez S520EX EMG 81/85
Ibanez RG350MP
Fender acoustic (Black)

Peavey Vypyr 15
Peavey 6505 212 combo
Last edited by PlayTheMetal at Jan 27, 2007,
#2
very good, u should name it question of the day, not suicide, sucide is a common name.
everything is fantastic, except for verse 2, "...all i did.......the fat kid." those ending to those lines arnt to good, so change them around a bit. you should have it sound like photograph by nickleback.check out my songs, one is about sucide also.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=514001

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=7