#1
"No Comforting Words"

VS 1

A bed is just a place to sleep
And the pillow another to weep
A tear stained piece of fabric
The emotions that reek havoc

A chip on the shoulder
Makes the world colder
The pain in the father's eyes
As he hears his child's cries

Chorus

He knows no comforting words
So he plays his best chords
A melody to soothe the heart
Until the pain departs

VS 2

She lifts her head slowly
And her eyes "say hold me"
Gently rocks her back and forth
Knowing she's his world

The perfect smile shines
Knowing she'll be fine
Because the notes exist
That creates pure bliss

Chorus

He knows no comforting words
So he plays his best chords
A melody to soothe the heart
Until the pain departs
#3
well i thought this piece was very good..(ahem)...having said that i do have some doubts

well i thought the first verse fit pretty good with your chorus, seeing as how it is about pain (or something of the sort) but what i can't understand is how the second verse would fit in the category of "painful"...well just an insight, you may want to change that up a bit

all in all though, i thought the writing scheme was very good...
6/10 heads up...