#1
Hey guys this is a song some of the lines may seem alittle over done almost like they are way to corney and also the beat my seem way off or one line seems too long but they fit in when we play the song so it's mostly the lyrical content i need crit on so any kind of critisism is welcome even if its rough thanks

We live it fast,
we play it hard.
Those who go to slow
end up scarred.
Burn out happens,
from living slow.
Those who live fast
Have more scars to show.
Dont want to be a Dunce, (Bad wording i know but its an inside joke so its staying!)
Just another fool.
Dont want to be faceless,
Just another tool.
Living life ont he edge,
Has taught me one thing.
Hanging off this ledge,
Has taught me to sing.
(chorus)
We know all about
Living head strong.
You say we dont know
Right from wrong.
We know all about
Singing the blues.
We wrote the book on it
It's called The Bad News

Being bored,
Going slow.
They aren't for me you see
I need scarrs to show
Being in a band,
Is just to pass the time.
We work on raising hell
All of the time
(chorus)
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Arrrgh! The agony! Bring me a virgin and a cup of Devil's brew!


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#2
its very cocky, is it supposed to be a metal song? but if its meant to sound arrogant its good...
crit mine please its "im not mine"
Don't try engaging me
The vaguest of shrugs
The prescription drugs
You'll never find
A person inside

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I agree with This End Up
#3
Ahaha i already did man i liked yours alot and yeah its supposed to be a big F YOU to some people
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Arrrgh! The agony! Bring me a virgin and a cup of Devil's brew!


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I can sweep with my boner.I have to use light strings, otherwise My penis will look like an emo wrist.
#4
Quote by The Bad Larry
Ahaha i already did man i liked yours alot and yeah its supposed to be a big F YOU to some people


thats good, i liked most of it, except the cliche being in a band part...
Don't try engaging me
The vaguest of shrugs
The prescription drugs
You'll never find
A person inside

Quote by saphrax
I agree with This End Up
#5
Ahaha alright ill work on that and BTW its supposed to be a strait up rock song, its what im best at! lol
Quote by Izdigger
Arrrgh! The agony! Bring me a virgin and a cup of Devil's brew!


Quote by mr kipling
I can sweep with my boner.I have to use light strings, otherwise My penis will look like an emo wrist.