#1
this is my first song...crit please any advice is greatly appreciated :-D

Verse 1

I was watching the news last night
reminded me a lot of you
those little things you do
and what you put me through

chorus

is there nothing i can say
to erase what you did to me
here is what we will do
can we just start over, brand new

verse 2

the hours arguing on the phone
nights and weekends spent alone
i wanna work this out
instead all i hear is the dial tone

chorus

is there nothing i can say
to erase what you did to me
here is what we will do
im going to forever rid myself of you

bridge

so can we please go back
back to the way it used to be
through all the hate in your eyes
i can see
all i want is for you
to love me

chorus


thanks a lot...
#2
idk, i think you should add more to the verse,its really short maybe 8 lines instead of 4