#1
Gun blast, think fast, I think he's hit...

Mixtures of accomplishments and incompletes,
(which would later be ruled as simply "obsolete")
determined the "weather patterns" for days at-a-time.
The "one" who controlled the "storms"
felt the need to roll-over-dead at-the-time.

At-this-time, a predecessor
(to what was once referred to as "the throne")
accepted the challenge.
(And did quite well if I might add)
But then Mr. President was shot in the head.
#2
Mixtures of accomplishments and incompletes,
(which would later be ruled as simply "obsolete")
determined the "weather patterns" for days at-a-time.
The "one" who controlled the "storms"
felt the need to roll-over-dead at-the-time
ok, you ended 2 lines with "time" try not to repeat the use of words at the end of the lines in a verse.

At-this-time, a predecessor
(to what was once referred to as "the throne")
accepted the challenge.
(And did quite well if I might add)
But then Mr. President was shot in the head.
this one is decent, until the last line. the " was shot in the head"
sounds like a forced rhyme, and it ruins the flow u had going, ending it sharply

and it sounds like a poem, not a song.
crit mine

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