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Voters: 2.
#1
I saw you two come out of the coffee house, you had a smile on your face he had his hand on your waist. You two look so great together all of a sudden Im felling under the weather ((Later))

(chorus) Dont try to hide it cause I wont buy it, I guess its time to try something new. (x2)

I dont get it I thought you where happy but it seems to me that my work is crappy.

Verse 1
Chours
Solo
Verse 2


PM me and tell me what you think and what I should change thanks!
#3
I saw you two come out of the coffee house,
you had a smile on your face
he had his hand on your waist.
You two look so great together
all of a sudden Im felling under the weather

Dont try to hide it
cause I wont buy it,
I guess its time to try something new

I dont get it
I thought you where happy
but it seems to me that my work is crappy
you should do it more like this, so its easier to read
plus ur verses or wat ever they are are very short. but the verse that says
"
I dont get it I thought you where happy but it seems to me that my work is crappy"
the "crappy" is a forced rhyme, and really doesnt work well here, try a differnt word,cuz with that in there, it sounds very cheesy

crit mine
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=513467
Last edited by ragglefraggle at Jan 28, 2007,
#4
you forgot to include the "i didn't read the FAQs and
i didn't know that i'm not allowed to have polls" option.

I just want to sleep forever.


#5
you know what I dont care what the heck you say about the rules. polls are here to use. why dont you suck a nuclear warhead.
#6
^ Oh you made my night, haven't warned anyone in a while.

Congrats, you're the fool who should listen to their peers....

.....wait for it....

*Banned*

Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.