#1
hey, ive only been playing guitar for a year and only been using GP for a couple months, so i am what you would like to call.."a newbie". this is like, one of the first things ive ever written on guitar and id like to know what people think of it. i cant write music for drums or bass so ive left that out cause if i tried id just feck it up lol, if anyone wanted to add some drums or a bass into it then be my guest xD i would appreciate it. anyhoo... enough of the rambling.

pretty simple and easy to play song, im not sure what genre it would fit under tho

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#2
probobly punk, emo or modern rock

sorry if thats an insult to you, but thats the only genres i can think of when listening to that
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#4
Definitely needs drums, and bass. I liked it, tho. Would go great with singing. Nice and happy song

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Genre? I dunno. Rock, I guess. I really don't know.
#5
You've got some great riffs in there, it just needs some structuring and drums and bass. It does remind me of rain for some reason lol. Good job!
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#6
Sorry I posted on my own thread for your song haha, but basically I liked it a lot. It sounds like a stylized and faster form of ballad. The arpeggios are really neat, and I would like playing the song myself actually.
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#8
Yeah, for someone who has been playing only for a year this is amazing.
i loved what the guitar on track 2 was doing, especially bars 50-70, that's great melody.
the only thing i didn't like was when the two guitars started playing in the intro, around bars 5-7, they didn't compliment each other well, but other than that it was an excellent piece.

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#9
thanks for the comments and suggestions guys really means alot. anyone fancy helping me out with the structure? im not quite sure how to go about that =\ still new to me :P im gunna attempt to add a bass line and a drum beat to it, and maybe tweak a few of the riffs. not sure yet, i'll keep you posted

i dont think the genre really matters tbh, as long as it sounds good then im happy
#10
I really liked it. The only thing wrong is it gets boring while only one track is playing. Maybe add some drums to make it a little less boring.
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#11
Not bad, i tried a bassline for it but it's not an easy song to work with.

I like it though
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#12
I actually really like this. It's really upbeat and I think with some nice drums and a decent bassline it could be a great song.

I, like other people have said, am bloody impressed at the ability of someone that's only played a year, nice work from your experience.

I especially like bars 12-21, there's some really nice lead work there that I think would really work well in a structured song.

Thanks alot for the crit, overall I'd give it an8.5/10, really nice work but I think with a little bit of structure you could definitely be on to something.
#13
I liked it! Not my genre though... Nice pop-rock song, maybe expand it a little and add bass&drums.

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#14
I really enjoyed it it didnt really seem to fall under any one genre had a unique sound to it. I really liked bars 12-21 its kind of a nice harmony or solo im not sure what you were going for but it sounds good.

Well done 9/10
#15
thanks again for the comments and suggestions . bars 12-21 is the chorus/interlude :P the solo, all 4 bars of it :P, starts at bar 50 lol ive tried putting a base line into it, and drums. but i suck so bad at it lol, but im not giving up :P gunna post up another song that ive been working on for a while tho =D
#16
I actually really like this and I'm into death metal and black metal. I think it sounds great to me. I don't even think it needs vocals. Bass wouldn't add a whole lot to this piece and even drums arn't that needed. But, coudn't hurt if you added them. Overall 9/10
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#18
GOod job man, it would sound pretty awesome with a live band.
Fav part are from 13 and up, reminds me the "good ol days" haha i dunno why though
#19
nice job man! one year? wow!

this sounds like an orchestra, so much emotion

add some drums and bass

8.5/10
#20
thanks for the crit, very much appreciated.

Yea you have a great song here, good riffs and very nice leads. It almost reminded me of Joe Satriani at some points, which is a good thing! Get some bass and drums down, and some good vocal work and it'll be amazing.
#21
thanks for your great crit on Cold Fire

im going to be honest, once the intro riff started i definently thought the song was going to suck. I hated the intro riff. It was just very weird to listen to for some reason, i think it was the timing of it. Thats what i was thinking up until bar 13. That bend just sounded GREAT. And then it just really kicked off. Great stuff. were you going to add drums to this? because i think that would really pull it all together. I didnt like bar 30-32, it just felt out of place and didnt go along with the rest of the song. Overall, it was a nice song, i wanna put some drums to this, maybe i can send you a version later, but this song has got some potential
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