#1
We've heard each other's words for some time
But today was when I realized
I'm hanging on to your voice
Basking in your presence kept me sublime
My thoughts sank in your deep brown eyes
Those moments kept me in awe

My secrets are locked inside me
With a burden of it breaking out
You're all I've been waiting for
But I'll be cautious to reveal
Not to be too transperant

Awake with questionable sentiment
Staring at the white ceiling paint
Pictures flashing through my head
The words you spoke made me feel alive again
With my feelings were kept in restraint
My emotions slowly bled

The way that you looked in my eyes
Kept me alive
And the conversations we shared
Made me shiver
#2
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We've heard each other's words for some time
But today was when I realized
I'm hanging on to your voice
Basking in your presence kept me sublime
My thoughts sank in your deep brown eyes
Those moments kept me in awe

My secrets are locked inside me
With a burden of it breaking out
You're all I've been waiting for
But I'll be cautious to reveal
Not to be too transperant

Awake with questionable sentiment
Staring at the white ceiling paint
Pictures flashing through my head
The words you spoke made me feel alive again
With my feelings were kept in restraint
My emotions slowly bled

The way that you looked in my eyes
Kept me alive
And the conversations we shared
Made me shiver

I've boldened all the lines that seemed to be out of place. As well, the second stanza seems to be lacking the same resonance the other stanzas have. The first stanza was terrific. Very well done. As well, the first 2 lines of the third stanza were juicy.