#1
a matchbook aurora,
an origami staircase;
her ink blots, emerging
from anagrammatic infinity,
turn black holes to clockwork.
she's a siren with plaster lungs,
singing of plastic-wrapped horizons,
but the binary warnings, spilling from
between the hindenburg's threadbare lips,
are disregarded as unconsumed orange peels.
and her coma engulfs him between silk sheets.

alea iacta est et acta est fabula...

ad finem ultimum.

I just want to sleep forever.


#4
err. me.

i was saying lame cause it had
gotten to almost the third page
and no one had said anything.

I just want to sleep forever.


#5
Quote by Grovermans
lame.


I lol'ed

Anyway, on topic

I liked it, don't really have the greatest attention span so i'm probably missing a lot

I like the way you wrapped it in code, personally it reminded me of the Binary that you talk about near the end (but that's just me clutching at straws i reckon)

It read well
Flowed nicely
Great language
all in all, nice piece

if you get a chance, "This is what we get for falling in lust", in my sig if you could please
Need Singing Advice?; Read the first page then ask questions.

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Damn Auals, you're messed up. :P


Quote by ZanasCross
This just reminded me of the time that my brother in law texted his mom on the night after his wedding. All it said was "Consummated."
#6
owh. yeah, i've posted two of my work here yesterday and i received little comment on it. it seems that people now are less interested in songwriting.
#7
Quote by Grovermans
a matchbook aurora,
an origami staircase;
her ink blots, emerging
from anagrammatic infinity,
turn black holes to clockwork.

[B]"anagrammatic infinity" is an amazing idea. i've never seen it incorporated into any writing, it makes this SO good. (the others are too, a bit abstract and i love it)[/B]

she's a siren with plaster lungs,
singing of plastic-wrapped horizons,
but the binary warnings, spilling from
between the hindenburg's threadbare lips,
are disregarded as unconsumed orange peels.
and her coma engulfs him between silk sheets.

[B]is that the correct form of plaster? it sounds weird, i know it has a slight different meaning but plastered [I]sounds[/I] better. what reference does "hindenburg?" have haha. sexy ending.[/B]

alea iacta est et acta est fabula...

ad finem ultimum.

[B]i understand the last part. the first part threw me off.[/B]


i don't know much about binary codings (other than how to do the notation) but i do know this is good writing, as always lover. i was hoping for a secret message from the end of every word with the letters hahah that would have been amazing.
#8
Quote by FatKidsOnMopeds</3
is that the correct form of plaster? it sounds weird, i know it has a slight different meaning but plastered sounds better.
i just used the noun form of "plaster" instead of the verb,
because i was trying to say the lungs were made of plaster.


Quote by FatKidsOnMopeds</3
what reference does "hindenburg?" have haha.
hindenburg = disaster. figure it out from there

anddd.
the ending.

i basically took three latin phrases
and i put them together for it.
from what i know, the ending is
roughly translated into this:

the die has been cast and the drama has been acted out...

to the final end.

I just want to sleep forever.


Last edited by Grovermans at Feb 1, 2007,