#1
hey people, crit for crit, my first song

Been sittin at home, dont know what to do

I'm bored so much, but I'm thinking of you

I dont know if I'm wasting my time

When Im with you I wish that you could be mine

I dont know if we will do well

I love you more than words could tell


You are always there for me

I wish my I could turn into our we

I dont know if we'll do well

I love you more than words could tell

I'll always be there for you

No matter what I will stay true

I dont know if we will do well

I love you more than words could tell



Will we do well

I love you more than words could tell

Will we do well



Remember the times when I talked to you

About the problems I was coming to

You always seem to have a way

To make me better with the things you say

You always know when theres something wrong

And you would talk to me all day long

I dont know if we will do well

I love you more than words could tell



You are always there for me

I wish my I could turn into our we

I dont know if we'll do well

I love you more than words could tell

I'll always be there for you

No matter what I will stay true

I dont know if we will do well

I love you more than words could tell
#2
Hey dude nice little song ya got there it could use some work some of the lines repeat too much for me personally but apart from that its good nice simple rhyming but that works with this kinda song what music were you thinking of putting along to it personally i would put somethin light and punky along to it using powerchords personally crit my work if you would please