#1
crit 4 crit

You can’t admit it on your own
Type it in or hold your tounge
You’re telling people it’s not your fault
Everyone’s making up stories that you said

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth

Drenched in puddles of excuses
Truth be told, it’s not that bad
I heard it over the intercom
I realize now you’re playing with my head

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth
Let the morning slip right past you
You’ll never let someone else take your confession

A lost cause, just wait until Wendsday
Tuesday’s just not long enough
A lot to say in just one day
Someone told me that you won’t show up

You’re missing from your seat today
Lost again, in you bed
Not another breath to take away
The door won’t open if you act this way

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth

Come back here we’re waiting for you
Truth be told it’s not that bad
I heard you left a message for me
I realize now why you can’t come back

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth
Let the morning slip right past you
You’ll never let someone else take your confession

A lost cause, just wait until Wendsday
Tuesday’s just not long enough
A lot to say in just one day
Someone told me that you won’t show up
Just walk away like yesterday
Another match lit on the fire
Another match lit on the fire

Another choice you couldn’t make
Another chance you couldn’t take
Don’t risk being seen
You know it will cost too much

Just how far could you have gotten
Someone else to be forgotten
I’m standing here without a reason
Off the stage and into my regret

Blast it on the radio
A song that makes you kick and scream
Drive away from all your pain
It makes us all just feel the same
Lost in our pretentous rhymes
We already heard that song
I feel like I’m in the passenger seat
Along with you and all your freinds.
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#2
You can’t admit it on your own
Type it in or hold your tounge
You’re telling people it’s not your fault
Everyone’s making up stories that you said
==== i think u could cut out the 'that' and it word still work

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth
===try rearranging the 2nd line, like this 'tell it of the truth you hide'

Drenched in puddles of excuses
Truth be told, it’s not that bad
I heard it over the intercom
I realize now you’re playing with my head
===intercom doesnt make sense

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth
Let the morning slip right past you
You’ll never let someone else take your confession
=====try cutting out 'else'

A lost cause, just wait until Wendsday
Tuesday’s just not long enough
A lot to say in just one day
Someone told me that you won’t show up
==== i dont liek this verse at all, it isnt easy to understand, and the first line doesnt make sense at all.

You’re missing from your seat today
Lost again, in you bed========'in you bed'?
Not another breath to take away
The door won’t open if you act this way
try for the second line'lost again, perhaps in your bed?'

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth

Come back here we’re waiting for you
Truth be told it’s not that bad
I heard you left a message for me
I realize now why you can’t come back
====interesting.....

Wait until the sun tomorrow
Tell it that you’re hiding from truth
Let the morning slip right past you
You’ll never let someone else take your confession
=====i cant tell which part is ur dam chorus

A lost cause, just wait until Wendsday
Tuesday’s just not long enough
A lot to say in just one day
Someone told me that you won’t show up
Just walk away like yesterday
Another match lit on the fire
Another match lit on the fire
=== the first 2 lines arnt good at all, and the match lit on fire thing doesnt seem to apply

Another choice you couldn’t make
Another chance you couldn’t take
Don’t risk being seen
You know it will cost too much
====doesnt make sense, the last 2 lines

Just how far could you have gotten
Someone else to be forgotten
I’m standing here without a reason
Off the stage and into my regret
===last line doesnt fit in my opinon

Blast it on the radio
A song that makes you kick and scream
Drive away from all your pain
It makes us all just feel the same
Lost in our pretentous rhymes
We already heard that song
I feel like I’m in the passenger seat
Along with you and all your freinds.
kinda makes sense and kinda doesnt.


ugh, ok u started out ok, but then when u got into the
'A lost cause, just wait until Wendsday'
then it started getting crappyer and crappyer.
'A lost cause, just wait until Wendsday' doesnt even make sense, towards the end i was so un pulled into ur lyrics, i was just praying the thing would end. and i couldnt tell wat part was ur chorus.ugh sorry if i sound like a asshole but u got me in a bad mood, u started out fine, then put in verse that didnt make sense, and are bad compared to ur first verses.
5.5/10
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#3
Ure song starts off well....with a lot of aggression and hate...but kind of mellows down towards the end...I dunno....if ure changing the mood of the music in between..its always a good idea to bring it back to the original....