#1
the ink propels the writer to write,
the last line left is a goodbye,
to all the things that made him,
to all the things that takes him away,

this band it's placed right on his arm,
this needle he takes isn't too far,
from tearing all his dreams apart,
To making all these lives erased,

take a look at what you will never see again,
all the people you thought were there are changing,
the mistake you made was drowning,
in the sorrow you left over whelmingly behind,

Tommorrow's a take back,
Today will change the way i breathe,
It's only a take back,
from you,
you never had to leave!
Last edited by lambofgodfold at Feb 4, 2007,
#2
the ink propels the writer to write,
the last line left is a goodbye,
mabe join these 2 verses
to all the things that made him,
to all the things that takes him away,

this band it's placed right on his arm,
this needle he takes isn't too far,
from tearing all his dreams apart,
To making all these lives erased,i dont really like this line

take a look at what you will never see again,
all the people you thought were there are changing,
the mistake you made was drowning,
in the sorrow you left over whelmingly behind,

Tommorrow's a take back,
Today will change the way i breathe,
It's only a take back,
from you,
you never had to leave!


um, not sure wat to say about this one. its pretty good, not sure wat its about. sounded like it was about someone taking drugs at one part.
#3
Thanx for the comment man, um about that line it was a big maybe to put in that spot so i placed it there to see if people liked it but i can change it with this if it sounds better " and making love breathe hard" - this line is talking about all the people that care for him and how worried they are! but yea the songs about a drug addict writting his final message! and then i throw in some emotions from his love ones!