#1
I don't know, I don't like this too much, but I like where it's going... any suggestions?


"sanctuary"

I, I can't decide, do I walk, or do I fly
and I, I can't go on, till I try, to carry on
I, I'm petrified, by the ground, and by the sky
and I, I will go on, when I try, to move along

sanctuary
world is scary
sanctuary
shelter me please

walk, and kiss the sky, fly, and kiss the ground
I, am not so wise, to look up, or to look down
here, is where I stay, for at least, till I can say
where, I want to stay, but I can't, decide today

sanctuary
world is scary
sanctuary
shelter me please

sanctuary
world is scary
sanctuary
shelter me please
#2
i dont liek how u keep on repeating double 'I" one or 2 would be good enough. and
world is scary

is kinda lame. sorry. try differnt words/rearrange it.but i have to admit it has potential. i like the whole cant decide to walk or fly decison to be made.

crit my newest if ya could( in my sig)