#1
Letter to a Ghost
(verse 1)
there's a letter in my head
and i swear it says i miss you
but i'll never write it down
i can't bear for it to reach you

you're gone to me forever
as you're living on the coast
it's so cold up in the north
and to me you're just a ghost

you said we'd be together
until the end of time
but your watch must be broken
cause there's still plenty left on mine

(chorus)
sometimes you'll be heavy
sometimes you'll be light
but i'll carry you along
for the rest of my life

no weight on my shoulders
its only on my mind
and i wish i could forget you
and leave you behind

in the past but in the present
i'm wasting all my time
with your picture on my dresser
and tears swelling my eyes

...oh god

...i miss you

(verse 2)
but what the letter in my head
wants so badly just to scream
will never be let out
and will just remain a dream

i wish the worms would come
but still i pray they never do
my fickle mind just can't decide
what i wish for you

cause i wanna hold you close
but you ran so far away
you left the state and left me here
with nothing else to say

but i miss you

(chorus)
sometimes you'll be heavy
sometimes you'll be light
but i'll carry you along
for the rest of my life

no weight on my shoulders
its only on my mind
and i wish i could forget you
and leave you behind

in the past but in the present
i'm wasting all my time
with your picture on my dresser
and tears swelling my eyes

...i miss you

...oh god

...i missed you

(short verse 3)
that letter was so long
but it gets shorter every month
as your memory fades so do you
and i can't remember much

i threw away your notes
i burnt all the picture frames
to forget your eyes and dry up mine
but i'll never forget your name

(outro)
i missed you... oh yeah
and i'll miss you... oh yeah

but i don't miss you
...now
#5
wow, really nice stuff here...

keep up the good work and I look forward to hearing more..

any plans of putting this to music?
Tonight..lets leave the world behind..

Jessyka + Casey = <3

The Gear:
Guitar: FENDER SQUIER M-80
Bass: Samick
#6
Quote by bmac85
Letter to a Ghost
(verse 1)
there's a letter in my head
and i swear it says i miss you
but i'll never write it down
i can't bear for it to reach you

very good opening i like how well it flows in my own melody.


you're gone to me forever
as you're living on the coast
it's so cold up in the north
and to me you're just a ghost

in line i u can use for instead of to . it will add much more meaning
like "you're gone for me forever". nice imagery i liked it alot


you said we'd be together
until the end of time
but your watch must be broken
cause there's still plenty left on mine

really nice

(chorus)
sometimes you'll be heavy
sometimes you'll be light
but i'll carry you along
for the rest of my life


no weight on my shoulders
its only on my mind
and i wish i could forget you
and leave you behind

in the past but in the present
i'm wasting all my time
with your picture on my dresser
and tears swelling my eyes

...oh god

...i miss you

(verse 2)
but what the letter in my head
wants so badly just to scream
will never be let out
and will just remain a dream

i wish the worms would come
but still i pray they never do
my fickle mind just can't decide
what i wish for you

cause i wanna hold you close
but you ran so far away
you left the state and left me here
with nothing else to say

but i miss you

(chorus)
sometimes you'll be heavy
sometimes you'll be light
but i'll carry you along
for the rest of my life

no weight on my shoulders
its only on my mind
and i wish i could forget you
and leave you behind

in the past but in the present
i'm wasting all my time
with your picture on my dresser
and tears swelling my eyes

...i miss you

...oh god

...i missed you

(short verse 3)
that letter was so long
but it gets shorter every month
as your memory fades so do you
and i can't remember much

i threw away your notes
i burnt all the picture frames
to forget your eyes and dry up mine
but i'll never forget your name

(outro)
i missed you... oh yeah
and i'll miss you... oh yeah

but i don't miss you
...now


u got som gr8 lines there. i liked how it flowed maybe i will full crit it later.keep up the good wrk
Hi
#7
thanks for all the comments guys...i do plan on recording it, i have the music written up for an acoustic version, but i really wanna do it with my electric and a piano with sort of an augustana feel to it, but acoustic is much easier for me to work with at this stage...thanks