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"White Flags and Red Lights"

I see the struggle written in between the lines.
Those stormy seas weren't kind.
Pools of gray stare me in the face every night.
I can see you won't make it to the light.

I see the anger brimming to the top of that volcanic heart.
Ashen and faded, it beats through the storm.
Sorrow it sings, masked by light
I see the sun setting in your eyes.

I want to hear what you want to do.
There's no way out that suits you.
When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn,
here is home. Here is home.

My white flag is waving you down. I give in.
We've got some time to spare.
Your red light shines above my head. You give in.
Don't let the sun die tonight. My world's in darkness.

My White Flag is waving as your red light shines so bright!
We're stuck in the middle of nowhere.
When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn.
Here is home. Here is home.
I want to hear what you want to do.
There's no way out that suits you.
When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn,
here is home. Here is home.

When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn,
here is home. Here is home.


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I see the struggle written in between the lines.
Those stormy seas weren't kind.mabe add 'so' inbetween 'wernt' and 'kind'
Pools of gray stare me in the face every night.
I can see you won't make it to the light.

I see the anger brimming to the top of that volcanic heart.
Ashen and faded, it beats through the storm.
Sorrow it sings, masked by light
I see the sun setting in your eyes.

I want to hear what you want to do.
There's no way out that suits you.
When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn,
here is home. Here is home.

My white flag is waving you down. I give in.try having 'i give in' in like back up vocals
We've got some time to spare.
Your red light shines above my head. You give in.same here
Don't let the sun die tonight. My world's in darkness.

My White Flag is waving as your red light shines so bright!
We're stuck in the middle of nowhere.
When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn.
Here is home. Here is home.
I want to hear what you want to do.
There's no way out that suits you.
When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn,
here is home. Here is home.

When you're lost and broken, tattered and torn,
here is home. Here is home

pretty good, i like it, but the flow in some parts seem a little choppy,cuz u have long lines, then like short liens next to each other.

crit my latest if u could