#1
A song I started a while ago and finally got back to..

Signs

Always looking for signs, reasons,
To prove my nonexistent existence.
Growing away from you, over time,
And in time.

I breathe in deep,
Clench my fist,
Determined to make things right,
The fire burns bright, tonight.

So move on,
But slow down,
I can’t catch up, I can’t hold on,
I’m losing my grip on..

This life seems strange,
As you walk in and I walk out,
We scream and shout,
“Why? Oh, why?”

Looking for the signs.

Walking with the seasons,
And not you.
My own pace, my rules, my game,
And not yours.

Feeling disconnected,
In more ways than one.
But, just for the fun
Of it all.

Somewhere someone gives a care,
Sometimes I wish I were there,
To see something,
To feel and believe what’s real.

Maybe something’s wrong with you,
It may be me,
But I can’t choose,
To give up, or to fight.

So move on, but don’t forget.
All the times we shared,
The cats we scared,
The cuts and bruises that..

We’ve suffered,
For too long now.
I don’t know how I’ve managed,
Without you by my side.

Looking for the signs.
It's difficult to win unless you're bored.
#2
Always looking for signs, reasons,
To prove my nonexistent existence.
Growing away from you, over time,
And in time.

i didnt like the 2nd line seemed very contradictory. The rest is good.

I breathe in deep,
Clench my fist,
Determined to make things right,
The fire burns bright, tonight.

The last line seems a bit disconnected maybe forced for the rhyme?

So move on,
But slow down,
I can’t catch up, I can’t hold on,
I’m losing my grip on..

Good verse

This life seems strange,
As you walk in and I walk out,
We scream and shout,
“Why? Oh, why?”

I dont really like this verse its a little confusing with lots of things going on walking in and out and screaming shouting and lots of simple words are repeated where it could be simplified

Looking for the signs.

Walking with the seasons,
And not you.
My own pace, my rules, my game,
And not yours.

I like this though maybe leave out the last line.

Feeling disconnected,
In more ways than one.
But, just for the fun
Of it all.

Again the last line seems a bit of

Somewhere someone gives a care,
Sometimes I wish I were there,
To see something,
To feel and believe what’s real.

I really liked the first two lines but not so much the second two they lacked flow. and didnt really fit with the rest.

Maybe something’s wrong with you,
It may be me,
But I can’t choose,
To give up, or to fight.

Good

So move on, but don’t forget.
All the times we shared,
The cats we scared,
The cuts and bruises that..

The cats line seems a bit random

We’ve suffered,
For too long now.
I don’t know how I’ve managed,
Without you by my side.

Ok

Looking for the signs.

Not a bad piece theres potential in parts im probably not reading it right because im really tired and probably was really harsh on it so sorry but i did like it.

Please check out one of mine in mysig cheers