Left_hander_nz
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Join date: Aug 2006
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#1
hey this is my first song...i have only been playing bass for about a year and only started learning about theory for the last 6 months

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snowblind190
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Join date: Jan 2007
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#2
pretty good, i see use of chord progression.


it would have been awesome if there was a super crazy mandolin solo though.
Last edited by snowblind190 at Feb 5, 2007,
Sean-Man
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#3
neato, get som lyrics in there and you could have a power ballad!!!
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#4
O_O Whoah... i was so happy, when i was listening this... it sounds really good!!(and happy to me... lol) But there are some things, that you could change, to make it even better:
- slow down the instrument, that is played so fast in the background. Belive me, if you slow it down, it will sound even better. I don't have guitar pro, but i slowed it down in power tab and it's awesome. Try it.
- change the outro. Try to make it slower, and slower, until it ends. End the song with a C chord.
- hmmm... maybe you should play the whole song on a jazz guitar? Try to replace those dist guitars. It's not necessary(that's how i write it?) but you could try to do this.

I very like tha bass line and the percussion. A slow, nice, relaxing song.


Crit mine? 3rd song in sig.
Left_hander_nz
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Join date: Aug 2006
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#5
thanks for crit guys ill crit yours asap......the instrument played really fast is a mandolin they have no sustain so they have to be tremelo picked to hold out long notes..but ill expriment with slowing it down.
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Pieceofmind019
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#6
I think it was an extremely well writen song with some really good elements but i dong think it was a rock ballad. i think it was more just a good pretty song.

The madelin was great in the intro i really like what it gave the song. And the solo couldnt have fit the song any better, very well dong on the solo.

Over all it was a very good piece that i enjoyed listening to. 9/10
PabloTaco
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Join date: Nov 2006
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#7
Whatever that thing was in the background that sounded like rapid tapping on glass got annoying pretty quickly, you might wanna change that