This is a small part of the song. And I think im done with that part, so please give me your opinions on it!

And as we plunge through the moonlight together
It feels like we'll live forever

Swimming in those moonbeams
Like they were small streams
Of Love...

Thank you!
you know it will be much better to crit the whole song rather than just a fraction of it . but this sounds pretty good i wont change anything of it but i am not that damn sure as i dont know in which part of ur song this piece lies in