#1
i havent decided whether i like Let go, or "it's not me, it's you" as my title better. i'm also not sure about the chorus. some feedback would be appreciated. crit for crit. thanks

Verse 1:
Too close for missels
so i'm switching to guns
I'm in the red zone
and though i'd love to,
i can't just turn and run
something about you
is forcing me to stay
you've put the shackles
on my ankles
and you've got a lot to say

Verse 2
I'm digging myself in
deeper than i can dig out
you could burry me now
or you could help me out
i can see what i've done
and its hurt you
it's not that i want
this to end
but it's something i've gotta do

Chorus:
The closer i get to you
the more i get hurt
but i can only run so far
'cause you've got me hanging by a string
that i wish you would let go of

Verse 3:
This song, i can tell
wasn't a huge success
because no matter what i say
we'll always be stuck in this mess
blame what you want
but i'm gonna pin this on you
'cause if it was up to me
all of this would be through
so why is it
that we just can't let go?

Chorus
the closer we get
the more we get hurt
i wanna let go
but you're forcing me to stay
'cause you go tme hanging by a string
you should've let go of

Outro:
So c'mon lets just let go
1, 2, 3, and we'll let go
lets just let go
i dont understand
why we cant just let go

thanks again. and crits would be appreciated
#2
Verse 1:
Too close for missels
so i'm switching to guns
I'm in the red zone
and though i'd love to,
i can't just turn and run
something about you
is forcing me to stay
you've put the shackles
on my ankles
and you've got a lot to say

What do the first two lines mean? Why are you using a metaphor about guns to say you're threatening your girlfriend? You're trying to say you're getting closer and closer, but you're not threatening her are you. I would change those two lines.

Verse 2
I'm digging myself in
deeper than i can dig out
you could burry me now
or you could help me out
i can see what i've done
and its hurt you
it's not that i want
this to end
but it's something i've gotta do

I dig this. Good verse.

Chorus:
The closer i get to you
the more i get hurt
but i can only run so far
'cause you've got me hanging by a string
that i wish you would let go of

Ok.

Verse 3:
This song, i can tell
wasn't a huge success
because no matter what i say
we'll always be stuck in this mess
blame what you want
but i'm gonna pin this on you
'cause if it was up to me
all of this would be through
so why is it
that we just can't let go?

Mmmm.

Chorus
the closer we get
the more we get hurt
i wanna let go
but you're forcing me to stay
'cause you go tme hanging by a string
you should've let go of

You could always end it yourself you know, it isn't totally her fault.

Outro:
So c'mon lets just let go
1, 2, 3, and we'll let go
lets just let go
i dont understand
why we cant just let go

No you hang up, no you hang up. Sounds like you're in love dude.
#3
the first line is taken from facebook, they use it at the bottom of there screens as a footer alot, come up with your own lines, it made me read the whole thing with a different mentality knowing you had taken that.
besides that its not bad. the first verse was my least favorite but the rest i liked. i also think the chorus could use a bit of tweaking because most of the third verse is ABAB so when you go into the chorus it seems to have a really bad flow to it. not terrible, but theres deffinately room for improvement.
#4
Pretty nice song, I agree with adscott though, you should change the first 2 lines. All in all, pretty decent work. I'll give it an 8/10
#6
Quote by Cyclones41
i havent decided whether i like Let go, or "it's not me, it's you" as my title better. i'm also not sure about the chorus. some feedback would be appreciated. crit for crit. thanks

Verse 1:
Too close for missels
so i'm switching to guns
I'm in the red zone
and though i'd love to,
i can't just turn and run
something about you
is forcing me to stay
you've put the shackles
on my ankles
and you've got a lot to say

Those first two lines seemed kinda, well, dumb. I didn't like them, and think it'd be better without them. The rest is ok.

Verse 2
I'm digging myself in
deeper than i can dig out
you could burry me now
or you could help me out
i can see what i've done
and its hurt you
it's not that i want
this to end
but it's something i've gotta do

"Burying myself" is a huuuuuge cliche. I say, take out this entire stanza and make a new one.

Chorus:
The closer i get to you
the more i get hurt
but i can only run so far
'cause you've got me hanging by a string
that i wish you would let go of

"the more I get hurt". I hate that line. It's a terrible one. The chorus would be 5 times better without it.

Verse 3:
This song, i can tell
wasn't a huge success
because no matter what i say
we'll always be stuck in this mess
blame what you want
but i'm gonna pin this on you
'cause if it was up to me
all of this would be through
so why is it
that we just can't let go?

Get rid of those last two lines.

Chorus
the closer we get
the more we get hurt
i wanna let go
but you're forcing me to stay
'cause you go tme hanging by a string
you should've let go of

"The more we get hurt." Again, this "hurt" thing is dumb.

Outro:
So c'mon lets just let go
1, 2, 3, and we'll let go
lets just let go
i dont understand
why we cant just let go

"Go go go go go gogogogogogogogo." Is that all you can say?

thanks again. and crits would be appreciated

I think it was lame and uncreative, but that's just my opinion.
Wade in the water, child.