#1
This is the first song I have ever written, so please be kind.
Enjoy! (By the way, im properly going to ad a verse or two.)



SPOKEN INTRO:

She said, spend this night with me
ill become your rocketship
And We will make love on the moon


VERSE:

As we jumped towards the sky
I wondered if would we ever die
Passing stars so bright
We were travelling with the speed of light

CHORUS:

And as we plunge through the moonlight together
It feels like we'll live forever

Swimming in those moonbeams
Like they were small streams
Of Love...

VERSE:

Flying among the stars
They were like passing cars
A million lights to see
With only you next to me

Our goal was in sight
We went to the Moon that night
We landed very soon
And made love on the Mooooooon...

CHORUS:

And as we plunge through the moonlight together
It feels like we'll live forever

Swimming in those moonbeams
Like they were small streams
Of Love...


Thank you!
#3
dont bump dude.but anyways...

SPOKEN INTRO:

She said, spend this night with me
ill become your rocketship
And We will make love on the moon
try combining 'we wil' to we'll. makes it flow better

VERSE:

As we jumped towards the sky
I wondered if would we ever die
Passing stars so bright
We were travelling with the speed of light
line 2 seemed a bit weak, as tho it was only there to rhyme
CHORUS:

And as we plunge through the moonlight together
It feels like we'll live forever
in my opinion, i would take out 'together' its not needed, cuz u already said 'we'
Swimming in those moonbeams
Like they were small streams
Of Love...

VERSE:

Flying among the stars
They were like passing cars
A million lights to see
With only you next to me

Our goal was in sight
We went to the Moon that night
We landed very soon
And made love on the Mooooooon...

CHORUS:

And as we plunge through the moonlight together
It feels like we'll live forever

Swimming in those moonbeams
Like they were small streams
Of Love...


not bad for ur first try. but i swear i've heard the whole' lets make love on the moon' before,which is a bit annoying. but not bad.

crit 'not welcome' if u could