#1
I haven't been on here in a long time... oh well, here goes crit for crit. It's short I know but it's the only thing i have worth posting....


Can you paint me a picture of hope?
Using your brush and all the strokes that you know
A pallete of colors on fresh canvas
Create something beautiful
I want to know beautiful...

The hues and the conrasts
Your reds versus my blues
The greens of the sheet
in the dark empty room

You're expressions is angry
while I have tears in my eyes
And the sheet makes us nervous
weary of the secrets we hide

I am imperfect
You are contrite
We are so beautiful...


I dunno you think i should attempt to add on to this?
Can you see in the dark? Can you see the look on your face?
Last edited by furtherfan21 at Feb 10, 2007,
#4
I added on to it, but it ended up being nothing liek what i started out as... oh welll
Can you see in the dark? Can you see the look on your face?