#1
hello everyone, just hoping that someone would like to take 1 min 49 seconds of their life to listen to my song... it is in the folk genre and inspired by lengthy listening to a band named Iron and Wine although it does not sound much like them.

You can find the song at this website (the name of the band so to speak has nothing to do with the music and was just a random choice):
http://www.myspace.com/thecauseofxenophobia

Here are the lyrics:

there once was
far across the sea
a beautiful one
didn't glance at me
i looked with both eyes
and saw the shame within
and there it went away
for another day
then i was gone


comments and other feedback would be greatly appreciated

Thank you very much
Rob
#2
I cant hear the vocals
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#3
a little muddled at the beggining of the song, but rather good. seemed like a lullabye almost
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#4
that was sort of the point but anyways, to be perfectly honest with you, in the recording i did not know that i was going to sing in the song, i just improved the words and this came out...
#7
Your voice is essentially not there, and it would be nice to hear for a song like this. Apart from that that and that thing at the very beginning, I enjoyed this. Very musical and lullaby-like. Even though it sounds relatively simple, it really does sound good. Complexity is obviously not needed to make a good tune, and it is so refreshing to hear something like this once in a while. Good job,

If you don't mind, would you critique mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=522123
#8
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Your voice is essentially not there, and it would be nice to hear for a song like this. Apart from that that and that thing at the very beginning, I enjoyed this. Very musical and lullaby-like. Even though it sounds relatively simple, it really does sound good. Complexity is obviously not needed to make a good tune, and it is so refreshing to hear something like this once in a while. Good job,

If you don't mind, would you critique mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=522123

thanks very much, i am off to check out your one now...