#1
Verse1:
Though times, they come and go
But latley tough times
are the only times I know
When everything I hear
And everything I see
It's all just misery
And why can't you just get along
Somethin' happened
What went wrong
Every day is so full of pain
Can't go on livin' this way

Chorus:
And today I'll make it on my own
I don't need you anymore

End

It's not finished I still need to add a second verse but please crit
Crit4crit
With an irresistible blend of reggae induced hip-hop and catchy pop-punk hooks, Half Chance Heroes captivates audiences with their unique sound and energetic stage show. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T8bSU0u8uvM
#2
Verse1:
Though times, they come and go
But latley (lately) tough times
are the only times I know
When everything I hear } I like these
And everything I see } two lines
It's all just misery
And why can't you just get along
Somethin' happened
What went wrong
Every day is so full of pain
Can't go on livin' this way

Chorus:
And today I'll make it on my own
I don't need you anymore

I honestly think the verse is very good. Nice lyrics. Maybe you should see a counselor? Lol.

Uplifting chorus, short and sweet.

Good song.
#3
Chorus resembles Hawthorne Heights... except the opposite. "I Can't make it on my own."
Actually it's not really that similar, just that line. I do like the rest though. The first verse is the best in my opinion.


Maybe change "It's all just misery." Seems like your building up a bit in the doubling of the lines before that, but then it kind of just goes weak. Do you know what I mean? haha, it's kind of hard to explain.