#1
I wrote this song a little while ago im only 15 and im not a proffesional or anything at songwriting but ide like some opinions on it my friends said it was amazing but they are my friends cant trust their opinions :P (Note: this songs not completely finished yet I am constantly changing it around and adding new stuff please dont be to harsh. Constructive critisism is welcomed.)


Metal battlefield

Fires burning through my lands
nothing you can do
Try to lend a helping hand
I could use a few
Fight alongside these brave souls
I will feel the pain
Bodies fill these fox holes
I am hardly sane

(chorus)
I am just a soldier now
On this battlefield
Use my metal here thats how
Guitar is what I wield
Play the riff that god has told
I will never die
Kill off all these helpless fools
Metal is how I survive

Here at this Iron gate
My men will hold the line
Each and every knows their fate
They are the divine
use their music as their weapon
Play it hard and strong
The enemys coming
The fight will be long
Wont be over till they're all gone

(chorus)
I am just a soldier now
On this battlefield
Use my metal here thats how
Guitar is what I wield
Play the riff that god has told
I will never die
Kill off all these helpless fools
Metal is how I survive
#2
seems pretty cool to me. I'm a real noob at this, but it sounds cool and it flows. I was able to sing it! Loved it!
make more songs like this one! keep it up!
hands down.
#3
Metal battlefield

Fires burning through my lands
nothing you can do
Try to lend a helping hand
I could use a few
Fight alongside these brave souls
I will feel the pain
Bodies fill these fox holes Bodies fill these deep foxholes
I am hardly sane Yet I am hardly sane sounds a lil better

(chorus)
I am just a soldier now
On this battlefield
Use my metal here thats how
Guitar is what I wield
Play the riff that god has told
I will never die
Kill off all these helpless fools
Metal is how I survive I love the chorus. Wouldn't change a thing

Here at this Iron gate
My men will hold the line
Each and every knows their fate
They are the divine
use their music as their weapon
Play it hard and strong
The enemys coming The fight is always long
The fight will be long The fight is always no long
Wont be over till they're all gone You could lose this line it kinda doesnt fit

(chorus)
I am just a soldier now
On this battlefield
Use my metal here thats how
Guitar is what I wield
Play the riff that god has told
I will never die
Kill off all these helpless fools
Metal is how I survive

Overall its a really great song. Great job. It's kool seeing young people write. Keep up the good work. If you could crit my new song. https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=523512