#1
Im a noob at song writing so dont expect this to be great or anything but yeah I wrote this one a little while ago. Opinions welcome.


She lives the same day everyday
Nothings ever different
Her heart is the way to self-destruction

(Chorus)
And I only try to repair all that she has done
but she lives in despair so scared of what has become

Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Of living for me
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of dying lonely
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of fading away!

She hates all that is
and she wont let anyone in
to the true reality
blinded by the image that is make believe

And I try to repair all that she has done
but she lives in despair so afraid of what has become

Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Of living for me
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of dying lonely
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of fading away!

(bridge)
I see her alone
shes dying inside
she has no one
she screams outloud
"Please save me from what ive become"
"A helpless mess im coming undone!"
#3
She lives the same day everyday
Nothings ever different
Her heart is the way to self-destruction
i only like the last line
(Chorus)
And I only try to repair all that she has done

but she lives in despair so scared of what has become
pretty good 2 lines
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Of living for me
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of dying lonely
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of fading away!
try cutting this down, and only use 2 'are u afraid?' imbetween ur lines
She hates all that is
and she wont let anyone in
to the true reality
blinded by the image that is make believe
try cutting down the last line

And I try to repair all that she has done
but she lives in despair so afraid of what has become

Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Of living for me
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of dying lonely
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
Are you afraid?
of fading away!

(bridge)
I see her alone
shes dying inside
she has no one
she screams outloud
"Please save me from what ive become"
"A helpless mess im coming undone!"
i dont like the bridge at all. i would change it or cut it out

not bad, its ok for ur first try