#1
Crit for Crit

Everything I write tends to be short now I guess.... whatever. I realize there are too many there the thats and stuff sorry about that.
Also I can't really think of a title so i just titled it this.

There's a hope, a peace
That can only be seen
In pictures.

There's a debonair
That's quietly austere
A European curiosity

I hear Geneva's perfect
A different kind of beautiful
That I'd really like to see.
Can you see in the dark? Can you see the look on your face?
#2
Come one people. Nobody has anything to say?
Can you see in the dark? Can you see the look on your face?
#3
i liked it man even if its un finished i suppose and short . i liked it. i liked opening stanza most simple but beautifully expressed
Hi
#5
Quote by furtherfan21


There's a hope, a peace
That can only be seen
In pictures.

You've captured a feeling I often have, perfectly, in 10 words, git.


There's a debonair
That's quietly austere
A European curiosity

Bloody hell, what a rhyme, I can't recall ever seeing 'austere' in a song before, let alone with debonair. I'm easily impressed but that is pretty sweet.

I hear Geneva's perfect
A different kind of beautiful
That I'd really like to see.

Once again, captured that emotion.



Not much there, but what is does its job. 4/5

Out of curiousity, why Geneva?