#1
Painstaking porn

My fairwells hurt my heart
They make me feel sad inside
Until I see your pretty face again
Nothing can help the space
Just a relay race
But impossible to win

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

All I say is any time without you
Makes me feel so dead inside
Its because you break me
You enjoy all these things I hate
I don’t care if you cant relate
To the feelings I feel for you

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

Wishing you were lying here
Looking at the moon
It reminds me of you
The distance between us
It shows we have trust
To believe
To believe

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

I die as you look into me
You make me so down
But also take me high
One side to the other
Never said to my mother
What I have confided in you
I die as you look into me
I die as you look into me
I die as you look into me

You are what is left of me
You are the feelings I feel
As the world crumbles by my feet
You shout and keep me real
One thing breaks me
It shakes me
In a submission
One more thing I can list on

Nothing keeps me as happy as you.
As you………..
As you………..
As you………..

metal_ore (www.myspace.com/defendingthedefeated)
#2
Painstaking porn - Odd Title ....I work in a sex shop and I see nothing that would bring porn to mind here. Or were you just looking to grab eyes with this?

My fairwells hurt my heart
They make me feel sad inside
This can be said in a better way...give me an analogy "Your fairwells make crumble inside
Like a stone wall no one sees" Okay not great but you get it.

Until I see your pretty face again
Nothing can help the space
Just a relay race
But impossible to win

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

All I say is any time without you
Makes me feel so dead inside

Its because you break me
You enjoy all these things I hate
I don’t care if you cant relate
To the feelings I feel for you

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

Wishing you were lying here
Looking at the moon
It reminds me of you
The distance between us
That cements our trust
To believe
To believe

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

I die as you look into me
You make me so down
But also take me high
One side to the other
Never said to my mother
What I have confided in you
I die as you look into me
I die as you look into me
I die as you look into me
Love this line.

You are what is left of me
You are the feelings I feel
As the world crumbles by my feet
You shout and keep me real
One thing breaks me
It shakes me
Into submission
One more thing I can list on

Nothing keeps me as happy as you.
As you………..
As you………..
As you………..
#3
Quote by metal_ore
Painstaking porn

My fairwells hurt my heart
They make me feel sad inside
these 2 lines are good as an opener
Until I see your pretty face again
Nothing can help the space
Just a relay race
But impossible to win

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

lot of told is ging around here change last line to since its...

All I say is any time without you
Makes me feel so dead inside
Its because you break me
You enjoy all these things I hate
I don’t care if you cant relate
To the feelings I feel for you


flow suffers a bit here 4 lineseems to be forced

Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

Wishing you were lying here
Looking at the moon
It reminds me of you
The distance between us
It shows we have trust
To believe
To believe

ok short and sweet


Told that its only 7 weeks to go
Told that its only 7 weeks to you
Told its not that far from it

I die as you look into me
You make me so down
But also take me high
One side to the other
Never said to my mother
What I have confided in you
I die as you look into me
I die as you look into me
I die as you look into me

dont repeat it


You are what is left of me
You are the feelings I feel
As the world crumbles by my feet
You shout and keep me real
One thing breaks me
It shakes me

cant get it

In a submission
One more thing I can list on

Nothing keeps me as happy as you.
As you………..
As you………..
As you………..

metal_ore (www.myspace.com/defendingthedefeated)


And yeah i have to say title and content do not match maybe you can change the title
ur title says that song will be about porn and the pain caused by it . but in content something else is going on
Hi
#4
hey guys thanks for your feedback! the title does relate, the song is obviously about two people, yet its about what they had....eg porn (sex) its intimacy between them that he misses, he cant wait to be back with her. her final look makes him feel dead.

thanks again tho!
metal_ore
www.myspace.com/defendingthedefeated