#1
Chord Prog Verses: D#, Cm, A#, G#
Bridge: D#, G#, D#, G#
Chorus: D#, A#, Cm, G#

1st Verse

It was late at night
Looked up at the sky
Saw a freckled light
A bouquet of fireflys.

And I, was astray,
In this sunless abyss
Like a castaway,
Directions were meaningless.

**Bridge**


2nd Verse


The air was crisp, like the morning bliss
Creepin up on me, as the grass began to dew.
I could see right through.

The drizzle began to drop.
Sneaking through the sky,
Ambushing the rooftops.

I realized my path was straight.
I could move forward and face my fate
Or I could,
turn around in disgrace.

**Bridge**

**Chorus**

Look ahead,
It was like deja-vu.
Spinnin in my head.
Though this never ending corkscrew

Look ahead,
It was like deja-vu.
Spinnin in my head.
Though this never ending corkscrew
Last edited by TonyKeidis at Feb 13, 2007,
#2
Quote by TonyKeidis
Chord Prog Verses: D#, Cm, A#, G#
Bridge: D#, G#, D#, G#
Chorus: D#, A#, Cm, G#

1st Verse

It was late at night
Looked up at the sky
Saw a freckled light
A bouquet of fireflys.
Tasty Imagery here. Good!

And I, was astray,
In this sunless abyss
Like a castaway,
Directions were meaningless.
"Sunless" could be switched with another word... but the last two lines
are perfect.


**Bridge**


2nd Verse


The air was crisp, like the morning bliss
Creepin up on me, as the grass began to dew.
I could see right through.

The drizzle began to drop.
Sneaking through the sky,
Ambushing the rooftops.
These last two stanzas were great, but again, the flow is disrupted by
the word choice. "Ambushing" and "Seaking" don't seem to fit.


I realized my path was straight.
I could move forward and face my fate
Or I could,
turn around in disgrace.
Another great stanza. I'll specify later on...
**Bridge**

**Chorus**

Look ahead,
It was like deja-vu.
Spinnin in my head.
Though this never ending corkscrew

Look ahead,
It was like deja-vu.
Spinnin in my head.
Though this never ending corkscrew
The last line seems forced...

There's great imagery/wording in this song, but I'm lost on what it's about....?
#3
Quote by Zuka
There's great imagery/wording in this song, but I'm lost on what it's about....?


Thanks For the Crit!

Its about a walk I had home one night basically. And Had to walk through a path, I didn't want to go through to get there. Thats the literal meaning, its not as deep as it may seem, but some may perceive it differently.
#4
"boquet of fireflies"

I love that line, nice metaphor. overall, nice imagery throughout, too. the only thing was, the last line "through this never ending corkscrew" seems way out of place. something more subtle would work for this, I think. nice lyrics!