#1
hey guys, this'll be the first song i've written and that i'm happy with in a long long time. I've just woken up and this seems to be pouring out so it'd be grand if anyone could have a look at it.

I'll crit 4 crit anything you want to send me as well.

Cheers very much.


This Is The End ::

The daggers are blunt
As he tries to hold them back
Across the horizon he can see them forming

The rain it pours
And the sky it turns to black
And in the distance there is no help coming

And the birds they soar
Whilst they can still escape
But his legs are tired, this is his place; this is his fate

[Chorus]
So where are the cavalry?
Where are his family?
Dare he admit this is the end?

So where are the light brigades?
Where are his friends today?
Should he admit this is the end?
[Chorus]

The rifles are loaded
As he cowers and repents
His eyes are closed and he can see him coming

The guns are firing
As he tried to keep them back
But they just keep coming

His heart is beating
As he’s lying on his back
And on his face the tears keep rolling

[Chorus]
So where are the cavalry?
Where are his family?
Dare he admit this is the end?

So where are the light brigades?
Where are his friends today?
Should he admit this is the end?
[Chorus]
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#2
Really good. I like it a lot. The only complate that I have is Verse 3, it does rythme like the last first two verses.
#3
dude its realy good. i think there was a line or two where i couldnt find a meter but yeah man sick lyrics.
#5
I wont be an ass, but please give the FAQ the once over, things have changed it seems, since your last post. Nothing in your thread titles except song title and genre.

peACE
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