#1
This is something my friend wrote, which I think it's really good but I want other opinions.

Firebird

What did you expect to see?
In a stupid little man like me,
You stabbed me in the center of my heart.

You brought me in, to stay.
Now you want me to go away,
I should've expected this from the start.

Rip my heart out and light it on fire,
Watch your hatred and rage burn higher.
I trusted you and now I'm lost for words,
My heart is slowly flying and burning as our firebird.

You've sent me away long ago
I have no more friends, only foes.
I'm fine on my own, so don't come for me.

Rip my heart out and light it on fire,
Watch your hatred and rage burn higher.
I trusted you and now I'm lost for words,
My heart is slowly flying and burning as our firebird.

But what has really occured here?
No one asks, or they just fear,
To find out what has ripped me apart like a knife.
#4
it's not bad. The flow needs some work, but that might just be the way I'm reading it. I realize that the way you sing it might influence that a lot.