#1
Fuck all.
Shit some.
Damn many.

Never been sledding and don't want to go.
I'm getting really sick of the banality,
and I'm already diseased from the trite.
Love 'cause you drink.
Drink 'cause you love.

Go to work drunk, then you'll win.
And then we'll have something to talk about.
Until then keep eating your makeup to
plug your goddamn mouth.
I don't want to hear it.
It's the time of year when every one of us will
turn into ostriches.

Burrow.
Burrow.
Burrow.
"William S. Burroughs?"
No, straight into the fucking ground.
It all goes back to what I said 15 lines ago.
Poor advice.
#2

Fuck all.
Shit some.
Damn many.

Never been sledding and don't want to go.
I'm getting really sick of the banality,
and I'm already diseased from the trite.
Love 'cause you drink.
Drink 'cause you love.

Well, the first three (and three) lines are fucking charming, I like the hook of the 4th and 5th.
The first line seems to be out of place, but strangely inclusive.


Go to work drunk, then you'll win.
And then we'll have something to talk about.
Until then keep eating your makeup to
plug your goddamn mouth.
I don't want to hear it.
It's the time of year when every one of us will
turn into ostriches.

I like the way it flows; without any flow. It's charming in a way, but plainly superb.

Burrow.
Burrow.
Burrow.
"William S. Burroughs?"
No, straight into the fucking ground.
It all goes back to what I said 15 lines ago.

Willian S. Boroughs? A strange conclusion to jump to, but the 4th line is the catch, real peach.
Back to the line about sledding? Well I can't get my head around it, but it's good.



Think i'm out of my depth with this one tbh, I like the viciousness and verocity of it, despite the undertone of being fooled away from something very plain. Either superbly flattering to decieve or with an undercurrent of genius to it. I can't decide, and I don't feel I should. 4.5/5
#4
that was fucking brilliant.

i don't know why, but i loved that more than
any other piece i've seen from you in a while.
i honestly don't know why i loved it so much,
but i have absolutely no complaints in this one.

the whole thing was fucking genius.

I just want to sleep forever.


#6
amazing, kind of random and the reference to William S. Burroughs is pretty nice. The title itself is quirky and random and I just love it.


Great piece of work here.
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