#1
So I'm working on a new song, and I was wondering if can get some opinions

In The End Of Time
In the end of time
It will be just you and I
And together, we'll be
For all eternity

It is written on our hearts
It's been there right from the start
It's in our dreams, it's in our lives
But we could never realize

That you and I were meant to be
In this love, this tradegy
Now close your eyes and take my hand
And beneath the stars you'll understand
That you and I were meant to be
In love for all eternity

Listen to our heartbeats
Come together and see
The way we were meant to love
Together in perfect tradegy

Can't you see
That you and I were meant to be
In this love, this tradegy
Now close your eyes and take my hand
And beneath the stars you'll understand
That you and I were meant to be
In love for all eternity

No matter where we go
No matter what we do
We'll always know
That it's just me and you

Can't you see
That you and I were meant to be
In this love, this tradegy
Now close your eyes and take my hand
And beneath the stars you'll understand
That you and I were meant to be
In love for all eternity

(silent instruments fade out)

That you and I were meant to be
In this love, this tradegy
Now close your eyes and take my hand
And beneath the stars you'll understand
That you and I were meant to be
In love for all eternity
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#2
It's a little too lovey-dovey for me, but this stood out:

That you and I were meant to be
In this love, this tradegy

You could definetly do something with those lines, maybe make it have no instruments whatsoever behind them and then have them come in after tragedy. Just a suggestion, nice job.