#1
I would really appreciate any opinions on either the lyrics or how the song actually sounds. it can be heard at www.myspace.com/neighborfromhell
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So much for sincerity
You can’t help but try to pick me apart
But there’s no use in truth or fiction
When I don’t feel like company tonight
Unless it’s going somewhere
Are you going somewhere?

So calm down and turn off the lights
Unless you prefer to stay up and fight
Cause I like the twisted mix
Of wanting and hating
I like to push you to the edge
Of loving me or dying

We’re still willing with our bodies
But certainly not with our eyes
As we stand under the roof
Listening to the noises
Of a thousand lonely drops
Soaking into the ground
And the past that’s over now

So calm down and turn off the lights
Unless you prefer to stay up and fight
Cause I like the twisted mix
Of wanting and hating
I like to push you to the edge
Of loving me or dying
#2
ok i'm listeing to it now.....
i really don't mean to offend but for the the amount i've heard so far you sound like your really forcing the sound of your voice out....its kinda whiny..i recommend singing louder and not holding back so much..the guitar part itself is really good the lyrics are also good although there is little indication of rhyming structure
i think you need to work on your singing a bit and it'll be a really good song...maybe build up the song aswell..there are certain points where you expect the muisc to build up and it drops back again
Snyper
#3
I don't really like your voice very much. It's good and all, but you hold it back too much.

The lyrics, I like. I like the cynical wittyness in it.
Good job.
Wade in the water, child.
#4
Yeah, you should work on your voice. The music is good but your voice really isnt. Not to criticize or anything, hopefully you wont take that the wrong way.

I really like the song though, it's great.

The second verse is definitely the best. It's different from the rest of the song.

"We’re still willing with our bodies
But certainly not with our eyes"


I especially like those lines.

Good job.


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#5
lyrics are very good. the whole meaning is understandable
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#6
Wow nice lyrics, i dont know much but they seem good to me. id listen to it but i gotz dial up. Yeah u seem to be gettin the same crits on ur voice as i get on mine