#1
verse 1:
pour this salt in your eyes
it will help soothe the pain
the pain you will have
once ive cut through your vein
the pain of the wound
will drive you insane


chorus:
you better realise
all is lost
theres nothing gained
you've burnt down the world
nothings left to explain

verse 2:
face the reality
your life is not a game
ill drive this axe to your head
the memorys will stain
one bullet, one shot
lift the gun and aim

chorus

verse 3:
head is spinning, eyes are blurred
it doesnt have to be this way
sweat is pouring from my head
what should i do? what should i say?
youve crossed the line to many times
now you have to pay!

chorus

LISTEN TO THE PAIN!

let me no what you think!
booo.....


did i scare you???
#3
please can somebody tell me wat they think? its had 46 views and nothing said!!
booo.....


did i scare you???
#4
this song freakin rocks dude!!lol i wouldnt change a thing the whole thing just rocks!! an umm if i may add a suggestion at the end of ur chours you better realise
all is lost
theres nothing gained
you've burnt down the world
nothings left to explain
all hope is lost
lol just an idea tho
its good tho!! i really liked it
reminded me of non point
#8
thanks everyone, glad you liked it
booo.....


did i scare you???
Last edited by Treazon at Feb 18, 2007,
#12
lol. i liked this alot. i think tis stongest point was the very first verse. the whole thing is pretty stong tho. im guessing... screamo?

lol.
darkangel322
The only truly consistent people are dead people.

#13
everything is said already song is good but yeah chorus is bit weak compared to the verses
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#14
Quote by darkangel322
lol. i liked this alot. i think tis stongest point was the very first verse. the whole thing is pretty stong tho. im guessing... screamo?

lol.
darkangel322



not really screamo, more heavy metal, but yeh the lyrics are screamed
booo.....


did i scare you???
#15
You might want to consider taking out some of instances of the word "pain." It's a very common cliche' for people to use. In this context, use some synonyms. Unless you were trying to be satirical or sarcastic, in which case, ignore what I said.
#16
I kept hearing "Listen to the pouring rain" by Jose Feliciano throughout reading this piece.

You should try it. It's funny.
This is not a pipe
#17
I wasn't too keen on them to be honest, they sound pretty juvenile over all. The images were all quite blunt (drive this axe into your head) and didn;t really do anything for me, sorry
#19
that song is realllyy good..and does sound like a metal song. the first verse a gotta say is class and is like the part that caught my attention most. reminds me of slipknot actually.