#1
Ok this is the first time I've posted any lyrics on this board (but these aren't the first I've written - just my favourite) so please go easy. If you're wondering how the rhyme scheme would work, think Citizen Erased by Muse.

Main difficulty I've had is finding a title.
I thought maybe "A deal is a deal even with a dirty dealer" (a line I, admittedly, stole from an episode of Futurama) or "Sleeping or stealing?" but I'm not really sure. Anyway, I'd love suggestions.

Lyrics:
Lock me in,
And never let me out,
Ignore me if I struggle,
Don’t listen if I shout,
Deal me in,
And show me how to cheat,
Poison my twisted luck,
Until I’ve seen defeat,

Chorus:
Lock me in a cage,
And throw away the key,
Dethrone all my rage,
Or I’ll never be free,
I’ll give up my life,
I’ll sell you my soul,
Take from me this strife,
Fill in me this hole,

From within,
Allow me to be freed,
Restrictions nothing more,
Plant dark and evil seeds,
Break me in,
But please don’t break me out,
Of this cage that traps me,
Close, bolt it locked and shut,

Chorus

Blood wears thin,
Bring me back from the dead,
Leaving it all behind,
Always you push ahead,
Closing in,
You control me from growth,
Manipulate my deeds,
Force the words from my mouth,

Chorus

Take me in,
Take me in from the cold,
Remove how numb I am,
The cold reaches my soul,
Wake me up,
Wake me from my feelings,
Bring me back from the dead,
Am I sleeping or stealing?

Chorus


This last part is something I considered putting in for an outro but I'm not sure about it.

Potential End:
Chains tie me,
Make me free,
Give me love,
Give me hate,
Look above,
Wipe my slate,
#2
To be honest with you, i'd keep the title you have, it's interesting and quite unique
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#3
^^Same, and i really like what you've done!
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#4
Thanks for your comments .

I am still considering keeping it, but I just feel as though I could find a better title. (Maybe that's just because I didn't technically think of it though I don't know)
#5
I like your title and the lyrics too !
But i think the potential end sucks.
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