#1
This is just something I wrote in about twenty minutes while constantly listening to RNRS's "Loose Arm Shake" in attempt to nail the vocals so I can do a cover. But nonetheless, the only real reason I'm posting this is because it's the only thing I've written all week. I'm not really in love with the chorus but oh well I'll fix it later.

Everybody Quit The Screamin'


Verse 1
Big wheelin’, drug dealin’
I’m getting so sick of stealin’

For no reason, I’m in season
Like pepper and I can’t stop sneezin’

Must be dreamin’, counterfeit schemin’
Everybody quit the screamin’

Chorus
Jump through the flamin’ hoop and
Come running back to see man
Where am I, I can’t tell you
Where’s the glass I gotta break through

Verse 2
I’m stumblin’, and bumblin’
The music business is so damn humblin’

Slow hummin’, I’m bummin’
Money cause the checks stopped comin’

Just funnin’, start runnin’
Cause here I come a gunnin’

Chorus
Jump through the flamin’ hoop and
Come running back to see man
Where am I, I can’t tell you
Where’s the glass I gotta break through

Verse 3
Hot blazin’ I’m raisin’
Hell and I need some savin’

Shoe gazin’, speed racin’
Your grace is just amazin’

F*ck preyin’, I’m playin’
Just forget what I’m sayin’

Chorus
Jump through the flamin’ hoop and
Come running back to see man
Where am I, I can’t tell you
Where’s the glass I gotta break through

Verse 4
Big wheelin’, drug dealin’
I’m getting so sick of stealin’

For no reason, I’m in season
Like pepper and I can’t stop sneezin’

Must be dreamin’, counterfeit schemin’
Everybody quit the screamin’

And everybody quit the screamin’
I massacre the guitar but make beautiful music in the process. Grunge lives through me!
Last edited by punkrockconcept at Feb 15, 2007,
#2
Nice, sounds like something Motley Crue or Warrant would play, which is awsesome. It looks like just an awesome rock song man
#3
This sounds like an old rock song. It's easy to screw up that style with the really simple rhymes but I think you did a really good job.

The chorus is really great too. You should work on making this into a song.


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Fender Mustang.
Yamaha FG-413SL.
#4
it really did sound like some motley crue man. great work
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Fender Highway One Telecaster
Squier Affinity Strat
Alvarez Acoustic

Amp
Crate GLX65

Pedals
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#6
the only thing I didn't like about it is the pepper and sneezing part. That seemed like a forced rhyme. Everything else was groovy.