#1
This is an acoustic song called "Jordan"


Intro

Verse 1:

AsI drive down the road, everything seems the same,
I see your pretty face, and I nod at our exchange.
I'll never forget the day we spent on Santa Monica pier,
before you met him, my life looked so clear.

Chorus:

Jordan please tell me,
please tell me, are you happy with him?
when I see you now, you always flash that same old grin.
But I can see behind that smile you're unhappy within.
Now Jordan I wish that I could turn back time,
I'd give you a million reasons why...
You should be mine.
You should be mine.


Verse 2:

I often wonder if I did something wrong.
Ever since you left me, I feel so withdrawn.
The days and the nights now they feel so long,
It's so hard to forget when sleep never comes.


Chorus

Verse 3:

You're a beutiful girl, Jordan we both know that's true,
That must be why I can't seem to get over you.
The nights we spent downtown will never leave my heart,
Those streets won't ever be the same now that we're apart.

Chorus

Outro

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please crit... it not final yet so all criticism is greatly appreciated


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#2
I liked it, but its to personal or it seems to personal.
Looking for a new sig!
#3
Yeah I'm liking the feel, but in my mind lyrics should be able to have some relativity to my life. Here your just going into WAY personal detail.
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Custom Fender Strat
Oscar Schmidt Acoustic
VK 112
Epi VJ
EHX Holy Grail
Ibanez DE7 Delay
Modded Tubescreamer TS7 -> TS-808
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#4
I dont think there's anything wrong with going into personal detail.

I mean, we dont even know if those are real personal details, I use fake people with fake personal details in songs all the time.


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Fender Mustang.
Yamaha FG-413SL.