#1
Cold, alone,
destitute from beyond the grave.
The spheres of influence
betrayed my inference.
You're so intolerant.

Hope is lost,
when seeds of greed start to bloom.
Faces of children
You're sworn to protect
vanish with indifference.

Lies,
it's all lies.
They steal the coins
from a dead man's eyes.

Shallow minds
Never see beneath the surface,
A superficial
mortality.
Corrupted in the womb.

Rule the earth.
Spawn of power, lust, and self.
Cradle destroying,
worshiper of wealth.
I'll follow another way.

Lies,
it's all lies.
You stole the coins
from a dead man's eyes.
#2
Cold, alone,
destitute from beyond the grave.
The spheres of influence
betrayed my inference.
You're so intolerant.
wow, nice opening, i liekd it
Hope is lost,
when seeds of greed start to bloom.
Faces of children
You're sworn to protect
vanish with indifference.
still good
Lies,
it's all lies.
They steal the coins
from a dead man's eyes.
i would try to add a little to line 2, but its fine how it is. but for a chorus, it jsut seemed to short.
Shallow minds
Never see beneath the surface,
A superficial
mortality.
Corrupted in the womb.
now this verse i didnt like for some reason. seemed a big strange mentioning the 'womb'

Rule the earth.
Spawn of power, lust, and self.
Cradle destroying,
worshiper of wealth.
I'll follow another way.

Lies,
it's all lies.
You stole the coins
from a dead man's eyes.

ok, i really like it, except for that 1 verse, jsut kinda sounded a big strange compared to the others.and the chorus is a bit short, with how good it is, i would want to extnend the chorus to give the listener a longer piece to enjoy more.9/10

crit any of mine if u could
#3
i love the concept of this piece, im sure you'll get it nailed down and polished up, cuz u seem really into this subejct so im not gona leave a part-by-part crit. gd idea
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