#1
Hello. Im a 15 year old guy from the faroes islands

this is my second song, and i would like you to give some comments about it...


"My guitar song"


Chorus:

Here i come
To show what im doing
Sitting on a roof with my six stringht guitar
Writing a song about everything im
Doing, Sharing, touhching


Verse 1.

Im under the bridge
Have nothing to do, staring in the water all day
Got nowhere to go, not welcome anywhere
But im trying my best to a part of the world

Chorus:

Here i come
To show what im doing
Sitting on a roof with my six stringht guitar
Writing a song about everything im
Doing, Sharing, touhching

Verse 2.

It come to an end
Still trying my best
To show everyone that i can still carry on
Sitting on a roof ending these lines
With my six stringth guitar and a beutiful view.

Chorus: x2

Here i come
To show what im doing
Sitting on a roof with my six stringht guitar
Writing a song about everything im
Doing, Sharing, touhching

..........that´s the song and there´s still the intro missing and some riffs, it´s a 2,5 minute song..

hoping some comments
#3
Dude. Do you have an issue with ripping off RHCP? Hahaha, "Under the Bridge"


Try this for your chorus...

I'm typing this message,
typing on the keys,
getting pissed off,
and wanting some cheese.


What I'm trying to say is your chorus sounds like you wrote it in 5 seconds.
#5
ummm yeah
since when is using two words from another song ripping it off?
i guess you can't put "to the" in a song without ripping GnR off right
#6
guitarjunky89 do you know one song eh? You're beginning to annoy me. Cease the unwarranted and frankly blind comparisons to other songs, now.

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