#1
C4C.
Sorta OTS.
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Hang in a gallery.

This was just a photograph,
but I've been assembled all wrong.
My face is just a block
a stolen expression
from far too many paintings.
I'm just the tip of a brush
worn as a fashion statement.
Quote by Cal UK
Alk hit the nail on the head there.
Last edited by Alk 3 addict at Feb 19, 2007,
#2
hm, very good, but the 'this was a photograph, but ive been put together all wrong' altho good, was confusing, cuz it seems like u switched perspectives, altho u probly ment it to be tht way.short, but i like it, cuz seems like if i was longer, it would ruin the nice short, good verse u got here.nice job.

leave a short crit if u could on 'the echoes'
#4
I know photographs aren't put together, but I have my reasons for writing it that way, it makes sense to me. It's just something that I don't want to change, because I feel like it is important, to me. I made some other small changes.

Thanks to both of you.

Quote by Cal UK
Alk hit the nail on the head there.