#1
i suck at writing songs but i wanted to start now so i wrote this song and im not sure what its about. dont make fun of it too much.
It

verse 1:

you gotta do what you never knew
before you get your life turned blue
but you have to do it
before they make you do it


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it


( little solo )


verse 2:

look you did it
it wasnt so hard
now that your time has come
and you are the star
what you looking for now
huh, ur looking for a pronoun?


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it

( solo )

verse 3:

i did it
just get rid of it
i cant sing this song
im an animal
deep and armed

(very small solo not even a mesure long)

(spoken)
im an animal
deep and armed

im an animal
deep and armed


be tough, but remember this is my first song so dont make fun of it too much.
thanks for reading it
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#2
verse 1:

you gotta do what you never knew
before you get your life turned blueblue is a cheesy, and kinda lame here
but you have to do it
before they make you do it


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it

hm, simple, but for some reason i like it a little

( little solo )


verse 2:

look you did it
it wasnt so hard
now that your time has come
and you are the starfor a beginner, very nice job using a false rhyme "hard,star" nice job
what you looking for now
huh, ur looking for a pronoun?doesnt make sense to me


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it

( solo )

verse 3:

i did it
just get rid of it
i cant sing this song
im an animal
deep and armed
take out line 3/edit it. i hate it wen pple mention the song, in thw song!
(very small solo not even a mesure long)

(spoken)
im an animal
deep and armed

im an animal
deep and armed


ok,not sure wat the 'im an animal deep and armed" means.try to explain tht a little. must say, good job for ur first try, most pple totally suck wen they do thier first song.


crit 'the echoes' if u could. even if it only says its good or bad.
#3
nice work dude ,the only thing is maybe u should think of a more colorful name one in which it sums up the whole song
+ =
#4
yea that was kinda just anything that rhymed went in there thats why blue was in there
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Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

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fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
#5
It

verse 1:

you gotta do what you never knew
before you get your life turned in two
but you have to do it
before they make you do it


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it


( little solo )


verse 2:

look you did it
it wasnt so hard
now that your time has come
and you are the star
what you looking for now
i cant tell, you took all my bow wow


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it

( solo )

verse 3:

i did it
just get rid of it
i cant sing this song
im an animal
deep and armed

(very small solo not even a mesure long)

(spoken)
im like a beast
all big and strong

im an animal
deep and armed


i fixed it up, how does this sound? i cant figure anything out for the "i cant sing this song" any suggestions?
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Quote by x_themetalfan_x
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fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
#6
can somone critic it?
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Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
#7
yo im back again, this line here...

before you get your life turned in two

doesnt make sense to me at all, once again seems like ur just trying to rhyme, sorry


this part...
im like a beast
all big and strong

i would change to...

im a beast
big and strong.

so it fits ther other one..

im an animal
deep and armed


crit the echoes if u could
#8
ok thanks, but any suggestions for before you get your life turned in two?
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Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
#10
It

verse 1:

you gotta do what you never knew
'cause your old routine wont do anymore
but you have to do this
before they make you do it


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it


( little solo )


verse 2:

look you did it
it wasnt so hard
now that your time has come
and you are the star
what you looking for now
i cant tell, you took all my bow wow


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it

( solo )

verse 3:

i did it
just get rid of it
i cant sing this song
im an animal
deep and armed

(very small solo not even a mesure long)

(spoken)
im a beast
big and strong

im an animal
deep and armed


i think im gonna keep the it in the chorus because the name of the song is It
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Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
#11
Usually, I'm opposed to repetition, but you really pulled it off well. I like in the first one where you did the pronoun thing. Poking fun of the overuse of "it." You get Devil Duck's official stamp of approval.
#12
hmm idk i liked the first verse, with the blue and all, colors are good metaphors in songs. And the chorus was nicely put in, just it fits lol. Its pretty kool!. I'd work on the other verses tho. They seem alot different then the first verse.but still its a good song!!
#13
It

verse 1:

you gotta do what you never knew
before your life goes blue
'cause your old routine wont do anymore
but you have to do this
before they make you do it
before you dig your life in a hole


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it


( little solo )


verse 2:

look you did it
it wasnt so hard
now that your time has come
and you are the star
what you looking for now
a little pronoun?


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it
just get to it

( solo )

verse 3:

i did it
just get rid of it
i cant sing this song
im an animal
deep and armed

(very small solo not even a mesure long)

(spoken)
im a beast
big and strong

im an animal
deep and armed
My Music
Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!
Last edited by ihaterap101 at Feb 19, 2007,
#14
when i was singing this i came up with an idea, tell me what you like more


chorus:

just do it
get right to it
if your gonna do it
good, you blew it
when are you gonna do it
they'll make you do it do you think this should be ill make you do it, or the way it is?
just get to it
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Quote by x_themetalfan_x
For a second I thought the title said "I swallowed my dick".

my gear:
fender stratocaster american deluxe SSS(s1)
G-DEC 30W amp
custom carrying case
jasmine by takamine acoustic
silvertone acoustic

AMAZING GUITAR SOLO!!!