I enjoy it, it's pretty cool. I think the open notes in the "hardcore part" should be palm muted, but other than that, it's pretty awesome. The riff in bars 19-26 doesn't feel like it should end on bar 26. It needs more of a capitulating riff, signifying that that riff has ended and that the next riff is an intro to the hardcore part. I think that would make that section a tad less boring. Overall, I like it.

Crit mine?
oh okay i see thanks for the crit i was aiming more twoards that being like the chorus/pre brdige chrous but i'll defintatly look into changing it.