#1
Please giv me ur comments on this!!

Bodybag

Your calm your relaxed your decisive your amazing
you dont even know the danger your facing
cut it open cut it deep make it bleed
so sick trying to feed your greed

Covered in blood
covered in dirt
to make it worse your bleeding
you'd be gone before you even realise your dieing


That it guys. can any of you give me a corus for this cos i cant make one
#2
um - not sure what you think but ill igve it a go

death has always been your ultimate goal
why bother living when death is so inviting
the warm embrace of eternal sleep
versus the pain of all this fighting


sorry about it not ryming. hope you can do some thing with it.
feel free to drop me a line