#1
Forgive and Forget


verse
Its better to give then to Receive
Its better to yield then to deceive
Her eyes are like pearls that pull me deep
Into dark waters near death in sleep

Prechorus
I bit the bullet just for you
I never saw it coming
With red eyes cried my nights for you…
I never saw you coming

Chorus
When will you learn to forgive?
I’ve bled my soul for you to live
You cast me out with no regret
Why can’t you learn to forgive and forget?

Verse 2
You exalted me on a burning foundation
Took every breath that I had in sweet suffocation
Put me in loves dungeon, bound by a rope
When I was neck high in water, I lost my hope

prechorus
With every kiss that took my air
I never saw it coming
All my defences left me bare
I never saw you coming

Chorus

When does a rose become a weed
Choked by its own thorns of fear and greed?
Is Love true or is it false
Love rendered me without a pulse
Just like a city that once stood tall
My heart was sheltered by Jericho’s wall
And Time is the only fix to ruin
Time can make ashes flower in bloom

Chorus


theres a song i wrote it started as a joke because i was going to use only cliche's but it became a little more and i wrote guitar for it and it has become a pretty cool and fun song.

~Blankoutcast
#2
Nice. Well done. It gets cliched at some lines, but you somehow manage to pull it back out of that area with the lines after.
#3
Quote by blankoutcast
Forgive and Forget


verse
Its better to give then to Receive
Its better to yield then to deceive
Her eyes are like pearls that pull me deep
Into dark waters near death in sleep


its good

Prechorus
I bit the bullet just for you
I never saw it coming
With red eyes cried my nights for you…
I never saw you coming

3 line seems bit forced

Chorus
When will you learn to forgive?
I’ve bled my soul for you to live
You cast me out with no regret
Why can’t you learn to forgive and forget?
best line
Verse 2
You exalted me on a burning foundation
Took every breath that I had in sweet suffocation
Put me in loves dungeon, bound by a rope
When I was neck high in water, I lost my hope


3 line is bit weird try rewording it


prechorus
With every kiss that took my air
I never saw it coming
All my defences left me bare
I never saw you coming

Chorus

When does a rose become a weed
Choked by its own thorns of fear and greed?
Is Love true or is it false
Love rendered me without a pulse
Just like a city that once stood tall
My heart was sheltered by Jericho’s wall
And Time is the only fix to ruin
Time can make ashes flower in bloom

Chorus


theres a song i wrote it started as a joke because i was going to use only cliche's but it became a little more and i wrote guitar for it and it has become a pretty cool and fun song.

~Blankoutcast


some of the lines seem forced other than that its nice . i will try to full crit it later
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