#1
This is another one of those punk/rock songs I've been writing for my two person band (need a drummer). Other than that it's kinda self explanatory I guess crit for a crit, and I apologize to those who gave a crit for my last song and I didn't return the favor.

Verse 1
Fill me up with a pocket full of swag
And I’ll die a happy man
Throw me out like seeds from your bag
And plant me in the sand

Raised as a hippy that don’t like L.S.D
Looks a little trippy- kinda like P.C.P

I’ve never done a drug in my life
That didn’t do me first!

(Ohh!)

Chorus
Walk around loaded like everyone thinks
Be back crushing pills on bathroom sinks
Stare up at everyone with bloodshot eyes
I’m another toxic interlude in disguise

Verse 2
Laced tight by your sexy cocaine seduction
Think I’ll be all right to runaway
Caught up in the wires of mental abduction
Come back later to see if I’m okay

Treated like a druggy but I’m pretty clean
Say I’ll be pushin’ a buggy is really mean

I’ve never done a drug in my life
That didn’t do me first!

(Ohh!)

Chorus
Walk around loaded like everyone thinks
Be back crushing pills on bathroom sinks
Stare up at everyone with bloodshot eyes
I’m another toxic interlude in disguise

Bridge
Party time, a syringe and a shot glass
Codeine body shots put you on your ass

The fun I have shouldn’t be used to condemn me
Because I go lookin’ for a good time as you see

Why give up what you think I would?
I’d only give up if I think I could

Verse 3
Shoot me up with a mouth full of poison
So I can melt into nothing
Thinking that I’m only just a boy’s son
So should I feel something

I’m looked at like I’m lazy cause I like to sleep
They may call me crazy, I can feel my spirit seep

I’ve never done a drug in my life
That didn’t do me first!

(Ohh!)

Chorus
Walk around loaded like everyone thinks
Be back crushing pills on bathroom sinks
Stare up at everyone with bloodshot eyes
I’m another toxic interlude in disguise
I massacre the guitar but make beautiful music in the process. Grunge lives through me!
#2
Say I’ll be pushin’ a buggy is really mean

This is the only line I thought needed some revision. It's a tad bit childish and too juvenile to really fit in with the rest.

Other than that, great job, man. I love this. You have a great voice and style in this. The rhyming meter is perfect and doesn't become repetitious (word?) or become really annoying. The descriptions were tight and don't leave much for the listener to guess on, which is great in my opinion. The wit was also very hilarious and refreshing for this forum. While on that, this is really original, nice thinking. Well, I'm done gushing now.

In short, your song really kicks ass, man. GJ.
Cause I love feelin' dirty
And I love feelin' cheap
And I love it when you hurt me
So drive those staples deep
#3
Thanks a bunch Mr. Nerk, you got anything you want me to take a look at.
I massacre the guitar but make beautiful music in the process. Grunge lives through me!
#4
Umm... I have two songs on the board right now, so take your pick.

There's Vanity and Ticking Time Bomb. Which ever you'd like.
Cause I love feelin' dirty
And I love feelin' cheap
And I love it when you hurt me
So drive those staples deep