#1
Hello, this took me about 10 minutes and I'm really not much of a writer. I'm not sure if I'd like to make it into a song or just keep it as some poem or whatever. Its about how life is short and time goes by quickly. I don't think I'm finished and I'll probably continue it. Hope it isn't too corny. Also, it isn't meant to be depressing or "emo" if you will, so I'm hoping no one gets that vibe considering it does mention death.

Let me hear you say it
Whisper in my ears
‘Cause in just a matter of seconds
Decades will soon be years

Time will never stop
You must keep moving on
Its hard to make the best of life
Knowing you’ll soon be gone

And soon the ticking of the clock
Matches the beating of my heart
And by the time we soon will die
Our lives, we did just start


Thoughts? Opinions? Thanks in advance.
Last edited by FLrhcpEA at Feb 22, 2007,
#2
decades will soon be years? did I miss something? I always thought the reverse was true. I know it rhymes, but come on...
Aside from that, not too too bad for 10 minutes work...
#3
Quote by IMTHAMAN01013
decades will soon be years? did I miss something? I always thought the reverse was true. I know it rhymes, but come on...


I meant for that line to show how quick time passes. A decade feel simply like a couple years because of how fast it went by.
#4
Decades will soon be years

Our days will soon be years?
That was a rare post..

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#7
Read the FAQ at the top.

This is going to be closed, be prepared to repost it correctly.
Cause I love feelin' dirty
And I love feelin' cheap
And I love it when you hurt me
So drive those staples deep
#8
Quote by nerk13
Read the FAQ at the top.

This is going to be closed, be prepared to repost it correctly.


Oh whys that?
#9
THREAD TITLES
For some reason, you people do not understand this rule. Your subject header must have ONLY the title of your song or work of writing, with the option of including the genre in brackets. No "PLZ CRIT," no "I really need help with this," no "this if my first song", NOTHING. SUBJECT HEADER. TITLE ONLY. If your title is wrong, your thread is closed. It's quite simple, really.


It's in the FAQ. Read it. It is your friend.
Cause I love feelin' dirty
And I love feelin' cheap
And I love it when you hurt me
So drive those staples deep
#10
Quote by FLrhcpEA
Oh whys that?


Cause its wrong oh so very wrong.

And thats just your comment.


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Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.