#1
Change the channel to seven for the news.
Get the latest on the star that'll get the views.
Breaking news is only of hearts breaking
And the drugs and alcohol those hearts are taking.
Where are the people that die for freedom?
Instead we'd rather just turn our backs and leave 'em.

Media birthed the blatant ignorance
That leaves us all in the propaganda's trance.
Go Army? Tell us where the army goes:
To purgatory or paradise, noone knows.
Why have freedom fighters become numbers?
Just 4000 people buried six feet under?

What the hell happened to our soldiers names?
Johnny gets his gun and is just a face?
Just a couple of legs in an endless race?
They are not just playing some senseless game...

Why have freedom fighters become numbers?
Just 4000 people buried six feet under?

Do we run from the real truth and hide?
Or do we confront reality this time?
Do we ignore the fact that soldiers died?
Or do we acknowlege that they gave their lives?

Why have freedom fighters become numbers?
Just 4000 people buried six feet under?
#3
Quote by ryananger
Change the channel to seven for the news.
Get the latest on the star that'll get the views.
Breaking news is only of hearts breaking
And the drugs and alcohol those hearts are taking.
Where are the people that die for freedom?
Instead we'd rather just turn our backs and leave 'em.


many lines in the verse are forced

Media birthed the blatant ignorance
That leaves us all in the propaganda's trance.
Go Army? Tell us where the army goes:
To purgatory or paradise, noone knows.
Why have freedom fighters become numbers?
Just 4000 people buried six feet under?

What the hell happened to our soldiers names?
Johnny gets his gun and is just a face?
Just a couple of legs in an endless race?
They are not just playing some senseless game...

Why have freedom fighters become numbers?
Just 4000 people buried six feet under?

Do we run from the real truth and hide?
Or do we confront reality this time?
Do we ignore the fact that soldiers died?
Or do we acknowlege that they gave their lives?

Why have freedom fighters become numbers?
Just 4000 people buried six feet under?


ok the whole idea about casuality of war is good but i am gonna tell you what's wrong with the piece.
some of the lines are very forced

secondly you are following the rhyme scheme AABBCC... in some verses when you will sing it it will produce monotony . try writing independent of conventional rhyme schemes it will give you a lot of freedom in your writing

i am srry if i came too harsh on you
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