This is one of the first songs I've ever written, it's quite old to me but I would really appreciate some honest feedback on it. Keep in mind this was the only run through recording it and I recorded it with a camcorder mic. I had to record the bridge seperately because I couldn't sing/rap and keep the strumming of the guitar during that time but everything else was recorded in one shot. Hope you guys enjoy.

It's the first song on my page: http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=user.viewprofile&friendid=118112883
This song has a good feel, I like the riffs general feel this song has. Like the other guy said, you may need to make your vocals abit louder. No offense but it some places they seemed abit flat (Your voice). I'm a little bit of a hypocrit since so is my singing. xD

They're decent though, better than average. The lyrics were pretty good to.
.Brand New.Bright Eyes.This Will Destroy You.

your vocals aren't loud enough to come out over the guitar. they also seem a bit monotone and off key.

thanks for the crit/
Too cool for a signature.
Improve your singing and record it louder.. -.-#
nice work with the guitar but playing full chords and repeating the same sequence of chords over and over gets boring..
This is my opinion..
hands down.
Yeah. The vocals are a little quiet and monotone, but the song is still cool. The guitar part reminds me of this radio head song (what is it called? it's from the bends cd!) Good job, though. I think rap with acoustic guitar is cool. I have a friend who does this. He covered ridin dirty and stuff on acoustic guitar. He does it in a kind of comedy style, though. I like your other songs, though because they are so dark and disturbing and I love songs like that. I think you should incorporate some rap with your acoustic guitar. Good job. Mind checking mine out? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=522091